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Yesterday,Sam got up at six o'clock,and then he rid his bike to the zoo enjoying a good time there.He and his parents had lunch at McDonald's.In the afternoon,sam and his classmates was playing basketball from four to six.After dinner ,Sam went for a walk with his father together,and then his father bought a classic CD for him.What a interesting day Sam had!