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Tom is a good boy for his daily life was very regularly. Generally, he got up at six then he wash his hands and face. After that, he went to school at 6:15.Considerating foods is not clean, he never ate outside. After class, he had lunch at home then he likes have a snap , so he can gain enough energy to gurantee his study effectively in the afternoon .when he was off his school he arrived home at nine twenty. That's all about one day of Tom.