文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用学术词汇就更好了;作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少;请注意分段。
Tom is a good boy for his daily life was very regularly. Generally, he got up at six then he wash his hands and face. After that, he went to school at 6:15.Considerating foods is not clean, he never ate outside. After class, he had lunch at home then he likes have a snap , so he can gain enough energy to guarantee his study effectively in the afternoon .when he was off his school he arrived home at nine twenty. That's all about one day of Tom.