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Sam got up at six o’clock yesterday morning. After that, he rode his bike to the park. He had great fun playing in the park. in the noon, he had lunch in McDonald’s with his parents. In the afternoon, Sam played basketball from four till six with his classmates. It was relaxed. After dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father. His father bought a classical CD for him. He was very happy because he enjoyed music very much. What a happy day Sam had!