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Sam got up at 6 o'clock yesterday.After that,he rode bicycle to the park,he was happy when he stay the park. At noon, he and his parents had lunch in the McDonald's.Sam played basketball with his classmate from four till six. After dinner,he and dad went for a walk,dad bought a classical CD for Sam,he was very happy because he enjoy music very much.what a fun day Sam had!