作者词汇量偏少,但单词拼写做的不错;丰富的使用了长难句;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用。
Sam got up at six c'clock yesterday morning ,after that ,he rode his bike go to the park,he have great fun in the park.at noon,he have lunch at McDonld's with his parents.in the afternoon,he play ball in the school form four to six,with his classmates.it was relaxing,after dinner,Sam went for a walk with his father,his father brought a classical cd for him,what a funny day!