句法知识较好,但需加强句式变化;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词;作者词汇表达的灵活性要加强,且注意拼写错误。
Sam got up six o'clock yesterday morning.and ride bike to park play is fun.at the nonn wiht parents going to McDonald's eat lunch.afternoon Sam wiht his classmate playing basketball at the school,from four PM till six PM.at after drinner,Sam with father go for a walk,fathe give he buy a classical CD.the day Sam with is fun.