句法知识较好,但需加强句式变化;没有能够有效地使用连接词和过渡词;请作者增加词汇表达的丰富度,且要加强拼写检查。
Sam got up six o'clock yesterday morning.then go to the park by bike,have fun in the park.at the nonn wiht parents going to McDonald's eat lunch.afternoon Sam with his classmate playing basketball at the school,from four PM till six PM.at after drinner,Sam with father go for a walk,fathe give he buy a classical CD.the day Sam with is fun.