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Sam got up six o'clock yesterday morning.then go to the park by bike,have fun in the park.at noon and parents to eat the lunch at McDonald's.afternoon Sam with his classmate playing basketball at the school,from four PM till six PM.at after drinner,Sam with father go for a walk,fathe give he buy a classical CD.the day Sam with is fun.