句法知识不错,多多加强复杂句的练习;请作者增加词汇表达的丰富度,且检查文中的拼写错误;没有能够有效地使用连接词和过渡词。
Sam got up six o'clock yesterday morning.Then go to the park by bike,have fun in the park.At noon and parents to eat lunch at McDonald's.In the afternoon Sam with his classmat eat the school playing basketball ,from four PM till six PM.at after drinner,Sam with father go for a walk,fathe give he buy a classical CD.the day Sam with is fun.