从句使用不足,建议增加长句和复杂句的使用;文中词汇表达稍欠丰富,可是单词拼写做的不错;没有能够有效地使用连接词和过渡词。
Sam got up six o'clock yesterday morning.Then go to the park by bike,have fun in the park.At noon and parents to eat lunch at McDonald's.In the afternoon Sam with his classmate in the school playing basketball ,from four PM till six PM.At after dinner,Sam with father go for a walk,fathe bought him a classical CD.the day Sam with is fun.