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Sam got up six o'clock yesterday morning.Then go to the park by bike,have be fun in the park.At noon and parents to eat lunch at McDonald's.In the afternoon Sam with his classmate in the school playing basketball ,from four PM till six PM.At after dinner,Sam with father for a walk,father bought him a classical CD.The day Sam with is fun.