可适当增加从句和复杂句使用;文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用高级词汇就更好了;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用。
The eyes are important to everybody, through them, we can see the sky, the sea, your love and the color of the world. We need to protect them, so how shall we do? First, you ought to keep this idea in mind all the time. Second, don't overuse them, as they are tired, give them a rest, and relax them by massage. Finally, keep them away from damage, for example, too closed to screen, stare straightly at the sun...