增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;作者词汇量偏小,另外文章有些单词拼写错误;语言不流畅。
Sam got up at 6:00 am. yesterday. Then he went to the park by bike. He had a great fun at the park. At noon, he had lunch with his parents at McDonald's. In the afternoon, Sam played baskeball with his classmates from 4:00pm.to 6:00pm.. After dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father. His father bought him a class music CD. What a wonderful day Sam had.