增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;作者使用词汇表达不够灵活,需要多使用一些高级词汇;语言不流畅。
Sam got up at six o’clock earily in yesterday morning. Then he rode his bike to the park. He played very happy. He had lunch with his parents in Mc Donald's at afternoon yesterday. Sam played basketball from four PM to six PM with his classmates. After dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father. His father bought a classical CD for him. He was very happy because he enjoys music very much. What a happy day Sam had!