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Sam got up at 6 o'clock yesterday morning. Then he went to the garden on bike. He had a lot of fun at the garden. He had lunch at mcdonald's with his parents. Afternoon he played basketball with his classmates from 4 till 6 o'clock . Sam went for a walk with his father after dinner, his father bought him a classic music CD. What a interesting day sam had!