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Yesterday, Sam got up at 6 o'clock. then he rode bicycle to garden, and he has a good day. he and his parent have lunch at McDonald. Sam and his classmate were play basketball at basketball court of school from 4 PM to 6 PM. after diner, sam gone for a walk with his father, and his father bought a CD of classical music. how interesting day for Sam!